I love your story and welcome very new chapter with a smile. I hate to say it but you have two errors that made me stop so I'm letting you know. paragraph/break 13 "Alonso, give me your belt...you too Owen" Aaron (John)commanded. The fifth paragraph break from the end. " Owen siganled John he needed his chair and Jacked moved away from Aaron's bed to assit John (Ianto) into the arm chair." Overall your story telling is worth the wait.
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Date: 2010-03-14 04:57 am (UTC)paragraph/break 13 "Alonso, give me your belt...you too Owen" Aaron (John)commanded.
The fifth paragraph break from the end. " Owen siganled John he needed his chair and Jacked moved away from Aaron's bed to assit John (Ianto) into the arm chair."
Overall your story telling is worth the wait.